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predator
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 |  Subject: Titus Haktal Thu Apr 17, 2014 11:06 pm | |
| Song to go along with the character (sorry [flash] did not work) https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Bj4CSKfoB1g Basic Information: - Quote :
Gender: Male
Age: 32
Race: Human
Languages: Common, Asevian
Birthplace: Asevia
Occupation: Mercenary
Religion: None
Hair Color: Jet Black
Hair Style: Long
Eye Color: Dark Yellowish-Brown
Skin Tone: Caucasian
Height: 6ft
Weight: 165lbs (No Armor)
Body Type: Mesomorph
Personality: - Quote :
- Titus Haktal is a generally kind person. He is hard to anger, and when he does lose his temper he will often fight the person who caused him to lose his temper in the first place. He is kind to all races but is most intrigued in the Elven culture. He enjoys fine dining and wine, especially wine. You will often see him in the tavern discussing war stories.
Appearance: - Quote :
- Titus when in his armor shines in his red trimmed armor. His scimitar is sheathed at his side ready for battle. He stands six foot and has a generally war hardened look to his face. His bardugon stands out as his most major facial feature which he keeps one side of his head shaved for resulting in it being completely shown. When he is using his fire magic to it's potential and not for small things like starting a camp fire, his eyes flare orangey red. Over the years of using Pyromacy Titus's body has taken a physical toll, his palms and areas of his hands are blackened from the years. He also has multiple burn scars going up and down his arms which are normally covered by his clothing. It is also said that if you stand near him he smells like ashes from a fire.
Back-story: - Spoiler:
Early Life:
Titus was born into a wealthy family due to his father being in the Order of Salvation and getting high wages. His mother stayed home taking care of the house and their two sons. His father Braedon Haktal was a well known slayer in his village often coming back from battles and teaching his two sons about Asevian customs and traditions. Braedon's family is the second generation of immigrants from El Deya that came to Asevia in seek of fame, fortune and to escape their religion of which his ancestors did not believe in. His mother is Asevian and her father was also a well known slayer passing down his teachings to Titus's father and then to his sons. Soon after Titus turned nine and his brother eleven their Grandfather died in battle. Titus and his brother showed a knack for Pyromancy at a young age after their father Braedon taught them some of the basics of Pyromancy to test their abilities. Titus's brother Sarok was two years old than him and learned how to use a sword first while Titus watched. Eventually Sarok began to use his Pyromancy with his swordplay and became mana crazed over a short period of time without many noticing it. Titus quickly caught on and urged him to stop using Pyromancy but Sarok did not. The day Sarok reached of age of becoming a man he went along with his father Braedon on a hunt. Titus sat at home with his mother worried what would happen and if he would return. Sarok never did return from that hunt and his father came back emotionally defeated.
When Braedon, Titus's father returned from the hunt with Sarok's charred body in his arms with a missing left arm. During the Hunt on the shore drake eggs hatched while they were destroying them causing many of the hunters to split off, in the fray Sarok was cornered while trying to get back to the others. In the panic Sarok and after fighting many drakes off he tapped too deeply into his mana and caused damage to himself creating a small burst of fire which can be seen from the ridge his father was standing on killing many drakes and himself. When seeing the body in Braedon's arms and a tear running down his cheek his mother collapsed crying and Titus became very distant after that. Over those two years after his brother passed Titus became much more wary of using Pyromancy in combat and has learned to restrain himself always keeping his brother in the back of his mind as a reminder. During those two years his father often sparred against him with swords and give him advice on slaying drakes and dragon-kind before going on his first hunt. Eventually Titus sought out a blacksmith and bought a fine scimitar with some coin given to him by his father and engraved his brother's name on the blade. When Titus turned eight-teen he went on his first hunt with the scimitar. He was one of a group of fifteen many young as him and some as old as his father (Late thirties). Titus was the first to run ahead take down many drakes along side his father and others. Disposing of many eggs that have yet to be hatched on the shore line there was but a few left and that's when most of the drakes had been slain. Suddenly there was a loud roar heard over the mountainside. All combat paused and one young fighter was taken down by a drake, suddenly a rather large drake emerged from over the mountain side flying over the village and raining down fire on his home and many others. Shortly after the dragon exhaled it's fiery breathe a small blanket of arrows some flaming. were seen flying directly at the beast from the mountain side. Most of the arrows flew past the large drake, some tore through it's wings and others lodged into it's underbelly. What was left of the small fifteen man group, now seven ran to the mountain side of where this event was taking place which was roughly two hundred feet away.
After a long run from the shore line to the village the small group of seven men including Titus and his father Braedon made it into the burning town. There the drake turned away from the mountainside and began a downward flight into the remains of the city causing a large path of which is slid across the landscape. There the beast fought to it's death the group of seven using the environment to their advantage by knocking a tower over on the beasts's head then in a joint action using their sword's, Titus's pyromancy and his fathers to finish off the beast. It put up a good fight killing another four men with it's talons and fire breathe before finally dying. The three were left, Braedon, Titus and some experienced slayer in his late thirties that was well armored. Eventually the three rest as the what's left of the army on the mountain side make their way down and into the village of Titus's grew up and where the dragon fell. As realization begins to settle in for Braedon and his son Titus the small army enters the city. There Zeki Perzys a well known fire-mage of the order emerges from the army while soldiers part and make way for him. Zeki makes a deal with Braedon to become a leader of his small regime and Titus to learn fire magic from him. They both gladly accept the offer knowing that they have nothing else to lose but themselves. After that day Titus had been recruited into the Order of Salvation.
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Adult Life:
Over the course of eight years Titus learned much from Zeki Perzys about Pyromancy and the slaying Dragon-kind in the fortress of Voktyr. He also had a bardugon carved into his face with the method of scarring, after the scars were permanent he had it re-applied with a fine red ink mixed with the blood of young drakes permanently applying it to his face signifying his rough path in life and the hardships of getting through times when they are tough. Titus still keeps his scimitar blade razor sharp with his brothers name still engraved on it in Asevian tongue. Blood of drakes and dragon-kind has gotten into the engravements and dried giving the name a red-ish tinge among the shiny metal. Titus's father now white grey haired dies commanding in a hunt where they became surrounded in a river valley and the entire group was wiped out by young dragon-kind and their mother. Learning about this news and Titus losing his last family member he asks Warden Commander Veryon Dolarys to leave through a letter which he is later granted permission due to reasons of mourning. From there Titus wishes to get away to a non-serpent infested land and makes his way to Evesar after a long sea journey which he became ill on after fighting off many sea drakes with his crew he was appointed. His ship docks in the Evesar Harbor sails torn and the ship itself with many holes filled with pitch and drake bones littered about. He plans to head far into the Estavyr mountain ranges and settle down while his crew members remain in the city. Over the years during combat Titus earns the nickname "The Crimson Mage" for his magic abilities.
Titus makes his way in a small riverboat after paying a fisherman off in an effort so save as much coin as he can to go up the river and dock in Estavyr. Now at the age of thirty two settles down in the somewhat quiet town making oils and other potions. He makes these potions with the knowledge he gained back at the Voktyr fortress while learning under Zeki Perzys. He also plans to work alongside the watch in an effort for decent wages and helping out the town. After years of fighting for the Order of Salvation, Titus wants to settle down and take his minds off the recent events that have occurred. Now he retreats to a rather foreign place compared to his homeland.
Abilities: - Spoiler:
Pyromancy: Over the years of using Pyromancy to fight off drakes and dragon-kind since he first became a man Titus is an Adept. He shows great restraint never truly pushing himself past the limits of which he knows of unless absolutely necessary. Titus can use fire to his advantage and has a quite large mana threshold able to fight on for prolonged amounts of time. He doesn't know all the tips and tricks of an expert just yet. - Spoiler:
Swordsmanship: Just as long he has been using pyromancy Titus was using a sword. He is Proficient in sword fighting. He knows how to react and time attacks but has difficulties in striking. He often relies on his Pyromancy when his swordsmanship fails. Potion making: Titus is a novice at potion making only knowing how to make dragon's breathe through trial and error, he has yet to perfect it but his buyers are aware of the risk they are taking. He channels an amount of mana into a solvent through meditation. He also can re-create the oil of which can light his blade on fire, learning how to make it from Zeki. Lock-picking: He is a novice at lock-picking often breaking the picks and failing to open the lock. He sometimes is able to successfully pick-lock a door but it depends on how determined he is on the said task. He primarily uses it to get into places when nobody is around or when need be.
Inventory: - Quote :
1x Set of his decorated Red Armor, he wears this in public quite often. It is easy to clean and is put on in pieces.
2x Pairs of hide boots
3x Pair of common clothes (Worn under the armor)
1x Pair of steel Fore-arm braces
1x Leather belt
2x Vials of oil
1x Custom Scimitar
250 Gold pieces saved over time
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| | Subject: Re: Titus Haktal Thu Apr 17, 2014 11:08 pm | |
| Moved to approval, feel free to ask any questions or tell me what you think about this character.
-Thanks Zak | |
| | | | Jacque
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| | Subject: Re: Titus Haktal Fri Apr 18, 2014 7:48 am | |
| Lorewise, I like your character. His background and story are solid and enjoyable, though it might be better to say that they slew a lesser kind of dragonkind, such as a drake or wyvern, as both are dangerous and feared. Dragons require much effort to slay as they are massive, intelligent and have their own designs. I am sorry for not getting the dragonkind lore out sooner, but I'll rush to complete it. In short, Dragons are rather smart and some are extremely old. They are so dangerous that even if one attacked Asevia the damage would be lethal, whole towns would be razed if it was of sufficient power.
I also like your usage of the bardugon and its representation, so I'm going to give this my approve, though keep in mind the last time someone killed a dragon was a long time ago, and with great cost. I would feel as if your character could develop even more if instead of a dragon he slew a drake, and from there you could develop your character's skill as he encountered more enemies.
I also assume as a mercenary he's a part of the Order, or at least has had formidable training within it, surely.
Anyway, I would also tone down your pyromancy a little. It is (don't quote me on this) the most dangerous school of magic that you can practice, often scarring and harming your own body when used irresponsibly, and it can never be predicted. To become great in this field of magic, he must have had to suffer a lot of failure, and even then it is rather hard to 'master' a school of magic when all of it is addictive and highly dangerous. I would change his physical attributes and his skill in pyromancy to reflect this. Though, I understand the basic principle of the combat side of this character is his fire magic and oils, so I don't think you should make him a 'beginner'. | |
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| | Subject: Re: Titus Haktal Fri Apr 18, 2014 12:42 pm | |
| Thanks for the quick reply Jacque I've also added you in steam. I didn't tone down his Pyromancy but what I did was give his body a physical toll from it due to over the years. And yeah he was a part of the Order of Salvation but now since he left it he is a mercenary. I also added in when he joined/was recruited into the order. I changed Dragon to drake leaving room for progress. | |
| | | | Blue
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| | Subject: Re: Titus Haktal Fri Apr 18, 2014 5:02 pm | |
| Something about this character rubs me the wrong way. Maybe it's how powerful he is (enough to kill a drake, of which lore hasn't even been finished yet). Magic, particularly fire magic, is supposed to be something just barely held back, so mastering it would be an extremely rare accomplishment. Yeah, he has scars, but I don't know how you'll approach this character, if you'll actually portray the magic correctly. As for the biography, the most important character-defining moment, the death of his brother, is brushed over so that his deeds and training can continue being listed. It feels as if you started with "A godlike fire mage" and built the character around those abilities, making the biography a 5-paragraph-long justification for them. It isn't even fully explained why he chose to go to Estavyr. To leave his land, yes, but why Estavyr of all places? I'm sorry if this isn't what you wanted to hear about your character. I know you put effort into it, but I can't give it my approval as it is currently. Here are my suggestions for improving this: - Make the biography more about Titus himself. Explore a little deeper how his brother's death affected him. How does he view pyromancy, and how has life on the harsh continent of Asevia shaped him?
- Why not make him a little younger and less experienced, giving him more room to grow as a character?
- Overall, less combat-focused, more character-focused.
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| | | | predator
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| | Subject: Re: Titus Haktal Fri Apr 18, 2014 11:01 pm | |
| - Blue wrote:
- Something about this character rubs me the wrong way. Maybe it's how powerful he is (enough to kill a drake, of which lore hasn't even been finished yet). Magic, particularly fire magic, is supposed to be something just barely held back, so mastering it would be an extremely rare accomplishment. Yeah, he has scars, but I don't know how you'll approach this character, if you'll actually portray the magic correctly.
As for the biography, the most important character-defining moment, the death of his brother, is brushed over so that his deeds and training can continue being listed. It feels as if you started with "A godlike fire mage" and built the character around those abilities, making the biography a 5-paragraph-long justification for them. It isn't even fully explained why he chose to go to Estavyr. To leave his land, yes, but why Estavyr of all places?
I'm sorry if this isn't what you wanted to hear about your character. I know you put effort into it, but I can't give it my approval as it is currently.
Here are my suggestions for improving this:
- Make the biography more about Titus himself. Explore a little deeper how his brother's death affected him. How does he view pyromancy, and how has life on the harsh continent of Asevia shaped him?
- Why not make him a little younger and less experienced, giving him more room to grow as a character?
- Overall, less combat-focused, more character-focused.
Don't take this the wrong way but I think you didn't exactly read this word for word or maybe you were tired while doing this but I did answer quite a bit of the questions you've listed here.
- He didn't kill a Drake by himself, he was with a group of ten people and only three were left after the Drake was slain. Titus, his father Braedon and an experienced slayer were the three.
- He chose to go to Estavyr because he crew which was on the same ship sailing across the Great Divide and they docked in Evesar. Titus wanted no affiliation with them, he went to the city right next to it(up river), which if you follow up the river is Estavyr to settle down and take his mind off of things.
- How does he view Pyromancy is he's quite cautious with it, since his brother's death he was shown what happens when you push your limits which Titus will almost never do unless need be.
- He's nowhere near a god-like firemage he's good at what he does. The more you practice something, the better you get at it. For instance when Zeki taught him at Voktyr while he was serving in the order. I think his age fits him well and there's still much more to progress in even if you're 32. There's always friends to make, a business to start and the watch to join those are just some of many examples of which he could progress.
-Added a bit more to the end to explain why he would move out of his homeland. -Toned down his swordsmanship quite a bit, made it fit his overall combat style much better. -Something I also wanted to say was the reason I put Expert in Pyromancy is because there is nothing for in between Adept and Expert. So what I've done is round down and changed it to Adept since he shows control and restraint but doesn't know all the tips and tricks an expert would have. (Toned down the Pyromancy) If you have anymore questions or concerns feel free to contact me over steam about them I think I cleared most of it up here. I tried contacting you today but you were offline most of the day or I was away. | |
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| | Subject: Re: Titus Haktal Sat Apr 19, 2014 2:08 am | |
| My apologies for the inaccurate assessment of your character. I guess I was a bit flustered earlier. Thank you for not taking it personally. Let's talk on SF about this. Edit: After the SF conversation I feel better about this character. The log is below if anyone wants to read it. - Spoiler:
10:12 PM - Blue: heya pred
10:12 PM - Blue: i left a post in your char page
10:12 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: hi
10:12 PM - Blue: mostly it was an apology for some overly harsh criticism
10:12 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: and I replied to it done alot of editing
10:12 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: it's fine
10:12 PM - Blue: i was at work for most of today
10:13 PM - Blue: only just got back
10:14 PM - Blue: anyways
10:14 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: 1:15am xD
10:14 PM - Blue: oh, no, i'm on PST
10:14 PM - Blue: it's 10:15 here
10:14 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: I wish
10:15 PM - Blue: so what i'm looking for in a character, is character. yes it sounds redundant, but my hope is that in advent the focus will shift away from skills and items and combat and more towards the characters themselves. i think this is a place where olden went wrong
10:16 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: I know, I've read your post and I understand what you are going for
10:17 PM - Blue: so i won't tell you reduce his fire magic unless i think it will benefit him as a character. i see you've already done that, so that's good
10:17 PM - Blue: i guess the reason i responded negatively is because i didn't feel like i got enough sense of who he is as a character
10:18 PM - Blue: anyways, you're probably aware of this already
10:21 PM - Blue: so is there anything you'd like to discuss?
10:21 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: um really it's all in the reply and updates in the background and all that
10:21 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: other than that I think we're good to go
10:21 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: toned down quite a bit
10:25 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: So, you read the updates?
10:25 PM - Blue: i'm in the process of reading them
10:25 PM - Blue: more slowly this time, lol
10:26 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: yeah what happened is I think the first time you read it you focused so hard on that picture your mind was blown
10:26 PM - Blue: no, i just didn't take enough time to read it. i was trying to reply to four character pages within an hour
10:26 PM - Blue: i have a couple of questions
10:27 PM - Blue: well actually, just one
10:27 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: joke xD
10:27 PM - Blue: Do Asevians typically fight dragonkind with fire?
10:28 PM - Blue: It seems a bit counterintuitive, fighting a fire-breathing creature who's probably flame-resistant with pyromancy
10:28 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: I thought that at first
10:28 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: but then I read further into it
10:29 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: 1min gonna get some quotes
10:29 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: ome members of the order that are proficient with magic usually wield oils and magic together to light their swords on fire. This has been said to help penetrate the tough skin that covers dragonkind, but it also works well in other situations. This low level magic is sometimes taught to those who survive their first hunt. As such, many of the members prefer to wield their weapons in combat alongside this particular magic.
10:29 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: that's an example I guess
10:29 PM - Blue: hmm, interesting
10:30 PM - Blue: i suppose even a creature that breathes fire can't be completely immune to it
10:30 PM - Blue: using a heated blade to cut through something makes some sense, but it'd be torture on the blade
10:30 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: Yeah, I also liked the whole oil part of combat like dousing your blade in it
10:30 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: also why I picked a battle-worn scimitar xD
10:31 PM - Blue: heating it like that over and over makes it brittle and prone to snap or even shatter
10:31 PM - Blue: he'll have to be careful about not swinging it too hard :V
10:31 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: yeah
10:32 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: then again I'd think they'd make them tougher on the island if they're doing that often
10:32 PM - Blue: probably
10:32 PM - Blue: but tougher would likely = heavier
10:33 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: yeah
10:33 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: he doesn't really rely on swordsmanship as much as his magic
10:34 PM - Blue: smart, since magic is pretty much a trump card anyways
10:34 PM - Blue: hmm, so tell about titus' brother sarok
10:34 PM - Blue: tell me*
10:35 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: what about him
10:36 PM - Blue: well, was he close to Titus? he was older, i think, right?
10:36 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: Two years older
10:36 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: both trained together though
10:36 PM - Blue: so maybe like someone titus looked up to? until he killed himself, of course
10:36 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: wasn't on purpose
10:36 PM - Blue: mhm
10:37 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: I guess you could say looked up to but not nearly as much as their father
10:37 PM - Blue: braedon, right?
10:37 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: yeah
10:38 PM - Blue: kind of a badass, that guy. one of the surviving three
10:38 PM - Blue: did his father help him get through that fight with the drake? like, watch his back?
10:39 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: the one which was attacking his hometown?
10:39 PM - Blue: yeah, the one they fought in the ten-man group
10:40 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: yes they fought in a joint effort
10:42 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: sorry if I'm not being descriptibe enough it's 1:41am just ask away if you'd like me to answer like real specific things
10:42 PM - Blue: it's okay, i know i'm being a bit probing with my questions
10:42 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: I'm fine with it
10:42 PM - Blue: you probably want some of this stuff to be kept secret, anyways
10:42 PM - Blue: to be found out IC
10:43 PM - Blue: it's just stuff to consider
10:44 PM - Blue: anyways, i think that's it
10:44 PM - [ZARP] PREDATOR: Yeah, I like keeping most of it open if you need to know the specifics
10:44 PM - Blue: i'll update my post. i want to see what zaku or krug says before moving it, but my concerns have all been addressed
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| | | | Zaku
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| | Subject: Re: Titus Haktal Tue Apr 22, 2014 8:50 am | |
| I feel like we're mulled over this character long enough and I'm wiling to give it a shot. I'm weary on how people are going to be RPing magic on server, but it's about time we let someone try so I'm going to give you the go ahead predator. Sorry for the delay as I know this characters been sat here for a while, feel free to hop on him server side and get to RPing. :) | |
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