If I managed to get anything wrong, such as languages, or other things on the page. I'd be more than happy to go over it with somebody, since some of the lore pages are lacking in certain specific elements, I found it difficult to be precise with certain topics. Apologies in advance!
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Ilaenallian Skywind (Il-a-nah-lee-an S-ky-W-ind) "Some days I think I'm going mad - The best of people usually are, but then I realize that I do in-fact jump to conclusions rather quickly. I suppose in some cases I can be viewed as a tragic hero, only I haven't yet died."
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General Information
Nicknames/Aliases: Ilaena, Laena
Age: ** 74 **
Languages: ** Common, along with Elven. Also fluent with Ekhel and High Nasiran, given her scholaric nature, she takes interest in bilangual studies. She can identify Old Ostian, but is by no means fluent without some sort of guidelines. **
Gender: ** ♀ Female ♀ **
Race: ** Elf **
Education: ** Homeschooled **
Alignment: ** Neutral-Good **
Persona: ** Outgoing - On Occasion **
Marital Status: ** Unmarried **
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Appearance
Height: ** 5'9'' **
Weight: ** 159 lbs **
Build: ** Lanky **
Physique and Demeanor: ** Dark Raven Coloured Hair, Skinny Build, Narrow-Bodied, Closed Demeanor. **
Eye Colour: ** Grey **
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Divine Magics: Laena has a gift when it comes to Divine Magics. Having been taught from a young age, it's become relatively practical for her over the years. Her fortes rely with the magics surrounding Sylandra (Pretty much Druidism). Ilaena's magic consists mostly of magic surrounding the spring-like element (Again, following Sylandra). Ilaena tends to use the earth and all of it's natural elements to her benefit. Her way of doing so is represented through plant-life and the like. Able to bend the shrubbery of the world to her will, Ilaena could be potentially dangerous away from stone walls. In a short consensus, Laena's a druid, and her powers are very similar to that of a dryad's in terms of being able to commune with nature, and manipulate it in her favor.
"The Earth itself is just as good of tool as any. Ponder this thesis; Do all tools not originate from the Earth in their primal form?"
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Athletics: Being an elf, Laena's relatively flexible, agile and generally athletic I suppose you could say. She's by no means physically strong, or powerful, but she's in good condition otherwise.
"Simply taking a walk through the forest could prove to be awfully fascinating!"
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Staff Combat: Ilaena sports a very peculiar fighting style. Her style is played mostly defensively, and takes after Silambam for the most part. Her offensive capabilities lack a bit in comparison to her defensive, mostly because that's simply how the fighting style is meant to be - It's strongly meant to be used to defend against multiple opponents, rather than be a majorly offensive fighting style. "I like to consider myself a pacifist, but one must defend oneself if necessary."
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Pride: Ilaena, being an elf is a generally proud individual. She takes pride in almost everything that she does, but more importantly, she takes pride in herself. One way to seriously wound her by non physical means would be to stab at her pride. "Pride slays thanksgiving, but a humble mind is the soil out of which thanks naturally grow."
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Nirvana: Ilaena's managed to find peace. Both internally, and with the world itself. She's come to terms with the things she cannot change, and looks for strength to bolster herself against the things she can.
"The simplification of life is one of the steps to inner peace. A persistent simplification will create an inner and outer well-being that places harmony in one's life. The life of inner peace, being harmonious and without stress, is the easiest type of existence."
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Drawbacks:
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Engineering: From simple pullies to clockwork, she has no idea how to really tinker with any of it. She has a bad spacial sense, and has relative difficulty with fathoming how it works.
"These whirring gizmos make my head spin."
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Explosives: She's by no means a 'docta'fisha'. She's not savvy with what makes things blow up, and what doesn't. "Woooah! Did you see that cart go up in flames..!? How very peculiar!"
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Pride: Ilaena, being an elf is a generally proud individual. She takes pride in almost everything that she does, but more importantly, she takes pride in herself. One way to seriously wound her by non physical means would be to stab at her pride. "Pride slays thanksgiving, but a humble mind is the soil out of which thanks naturally grow."
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Naive: Ilaena is relatively susceptible to treachery - Though she often watches herself carefully, Ilaena is naive in the ways of treachery. She makes an attempt to give most people the benefit of the doubt until proven otherwise. "Well, I mean - he looked trustworthy, he even smiled at me!"
Biography:
Not yet finished.
Tasks & Goals:
Not yet finished.
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She sports the basic clockwork timepiece of Leobean craft. It's shaped like a spider, and the timepiece itself is about the size of a coin. "It turns, and tells me the time. I have no idea how it works, however."
Ilaena carries with her, an heirloom in a sense, her staff. It's said that the materials that the staff is made from come from The Savage Lands. Crafted by her ancestors, and passed through the generations of druids in the Skywind family. It's crafted of ironwood bark, and has a pyrite coloured attunement orb on the top, causing spells to take slight less toll on the mind to cast. The staff itself would have the physical impact of wood, but would be as durable as metal, making it an effective defensive tool in a fight against any form of weapon that wouldn't just bend something as strong as iron. [/size]
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Like it so far, just a few things I'd like to point out.
A little more on her Magic would be cool, I totally get the gist of it, but a little more of an explanation will help the administration team understand what we're accepting. I feel as though this will be answered a bit when you find the time to finish this and post your biography, so no big deal here.
I also apologize if you found the lore lacking in some things, it's all one big work in progress as we've been churning it out over the last few weeks. I feel as though you took the time to read the Elven lore and understand the kind of character you're making here so I applaud you for that.
As for the clockwork watch, the technology in Advent is very low, and even a timepiece like a simple clock would be either incredibly rare, or expensive. However, I'm totally willing to accept this piece on the grounds that you know it's rare and I'm hoping in your backstory there might be some explanation for her having it. I like to think you specifically included in to be from Leoben (which is most likely the only country in the world sophisticated enough for something like this) and that was a nice touch.
I know this is a WIP, so I'll leave you to editing it and finishing it up at your own pace. Good work so far though. :) Just lemme know when you want a final word and you're ready to go.
I don't see why you listed skills she's no good at. Unless it's your plan to develop those skills over time?
Other than that, I can't see anything out of place here. It needs a biography, obviously, and a little more detail, but so far so good. The clock-spider is a bit weird, but could've come from some tinkerer in Leoben.
I think you should talk to Krug about her Divine Magic, when he gets back. I'm not sure if it can do what this page says it can. Maybe SF me, as well, to sort out any confusion.
As any character, a backstory or some other expository seems necessary for a good few characters, and absolutely necessary for characters approaching magic.
The abilities that you outline in themselves do not seem to be out of order. I would, however, like a lore-body to give their opinion on how much a normal humanoid may wield the powers of nature, and whether or not they'd be strong enough to in fact resemble a Dryad's. They are particularly powerful creatures, with limitations directly in line with that magnitude.
I suppose we'll learn how she found her fancy timepiece, or the money to buy it, in her backstory. I would also say that a staff like that would make her defensive fighting a little less opportune; however, I think that helps the character.
The abilities that you outline in themselves do not seem to be out of order. I would, however, like a lore-body to give their opinion on how much a normal humanoid may wield the powers of nature, and whether or not they'd be strong enough to in fact resemble a Dryad's. They are particularly powerful creatures, with limitations directly in line with that magnitude.
My thoughts exactly. When I wrote the Dryad lore I'd intended them to be the only ones with any real control over plants and animals, and even theirs isn't quite at the level seen here. Obviously, if Jacque or Zaku have a different idea for how this kind of mechanic works, the lore will have to be altered.
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